Reflection Task 2a
Facebook
I chose this
topic because I think it is a current and controversial issue. I don't think
Facebook is something dangerous or something must be avoided. However, most of the
Facebook users don't use it wisely. For example, I think Facebook should be a
place where we contact with our friends, share our memories and ideas. Some
people see it as a dating site. They are trying to find girl or boy friends.
Secondly, they don’t pay attention to privacy. We see all the things these
people do, where they go, what they eat or drink. They even make gossip on
comments. At least, they can send messages from Facebook but they prefer to do
it openly.
Thirdly, everything has become virtual. We have virtual friends. For
example, we are Facebook friends with people whom we don’t know who he is or
whom we haven’t even say hello in real life. Thirdly, people upload their
photos on Facebook and they want other people to like their photos. They even
compete with each other. They send messages like ‘will you please like my
photo? , If you like my photo, I will like yours.’ I think it is nonsense! If I
really like your photo, I will like it on Facebook without seeing a request
from you. I think it is caused by lack of self-confidence and personality
problems. People want to be accepted and liked by others. If they are not
approved by the others, they don’t want to share their ideas or photos. Lastly,
people share their all information on Facebook. I don’t think it is so
reliable. However, if we be careful, Facebook can be a useful and entertaining social network. Facebook is not a bad thing but it is all depends on how you see it and
how you use it!
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YanıtlaSilDear Sena,
SilYour topic is interesting. I'm using Facebook,too. Your paragraph attracted my attention. Your paragraph's structure is well. You explain your ideas about the topic in a good way. Your pictures are wonderful. You support your ideas with examples and pictures. However, I saw some grammatical mistakes. In your first sentence you said ' I think it is current and a controversial issue. ' but I think it should be '.. it is a current and controversial issue.' and in the 23rd line, you said 'Thirdly, people upload their photos on Facebook and they want other people like their photos.' I think it should be ' .... want other people to like...' 'To' is necessary. The other mistake is in the 31st line. You said ' I think it causes from lack of self-confidence and personality problems.' I think the verb should be different. It can be ' I think it arises from lack of self-confidence and personality problems.' So, the sentence can become more plain. Generally, I like your writing and writing style. Good luck for other writings ! :)
Thank you for correcting my mistakes !! :)
Sil